C. D. - character development

condog wrote:(Street? Oh lord i cant work with that! lol Cant we have like glowing plants and crazy animals like from Avatar lol)

We all came in the house to get out of the rain. We've already got a strange enough crowd...

condog wrote:(Street? Oh lord i cant work with that! lol Cant we have like glowing plants and crazy animals like from Avatar lol)

(Hey, hey, hey!
All inhabited planets I've ever visited have streets, and I've seen a few! They're pretty central at a certain point in the social evolution of most intelligent species.)

p.s. I made a new character chat! I hope you guys will be in this one too!
http://thecharacterchatrevo.niceboards.org/t440-character-chats-are-fun
p.p.s. My other characters are in this one. Cassie and Evan aren't in there but Liz, Ezra, and Andrew are.

gh3325 wrote:"It's well... Cassie," said Evan, peeking at Cassie, who was writing feverishly.

At Evan's words Cassie looked up, "You drew me?"

"Yeah," said Evan, who was turning a bright shade of red.

Cassie turned to Victor, "A while ago he promised to illiustrate some of my poems, if I would publish them. Back then I hadn't taken the promise seriously, but Evan did. The journal that I write in...the front's filled with illiustrations. He left me some space in the back to write more." she said, turning the journal around to show Victor.

Victor: "It's... Well. I generally get slapped when I draw someone in that style, but it's definitely high quality. It reminds me more of the Italian style, a kind of Pre-Raphaelism, if you will, and that seems to work very well. Personally, I think you need a little more shading... here." he points too a fold of curtain in the background. "And... here." He points to the space where Cassie is sitting (in the picture). "personally I would be proud of such a work."

(Wow, you guys wrote alot. Where are we? What's been happening?)

flaggirl3 wrote:(Wow, you guys wrote alot. Where are we? What's been happening?)

((Same old, same old. Just sittin' here, waiting for it to stop raining and talking about crazy stuff like aliens and art.))

(Haha, okay. So how do you suggest I jump in?)

((Just walk in through the door. It's been smashed off of it's hinges.))

"Thank you!" said Evan. "Wow, I'm really glad you like it."

"He doubts his work too much..." said Cassie.

((flaggirl3: (I'm guessing by your username that you're in the color guard?) Well, Dylan's been sitting here this whole time, so it's not like you really need to jump in, per se. Just join the conversation

Condog: You made your own language for your book, too? About how many words does it have? What are the grammar conventions? What does its alphabet look like?))

"Ni drygaj Pedla?" Peter asked the...supposed werewolf...lighting kid...I mean really, what the hell. Anyway, this time, Peter's question was in earnest.

"If your going to say something, say it in english...please I'm begging you. I'm already so confused as it is..." said Evan.

Dan:
I look at him and say, "Honest I do not know what you just said, and that frightens me because I am supposed to know every language human and non human" I say shrugging I proceed to keep looking out the window. I decide to go and see what I can see, "Wait here," I tell them, "I'll be right back" I then Binarize before their eyes and my invisible code dissapears out the door. (also, my language is just words I made up lol but I am kind of trying to have it flow together and just FYI Binarizing is something Dan can do, he can change other people objects around him and almost anything into a binary code)

(For some reason, I haven't been getting the notifications for these. Where are we now?)

((Jelsa: Some werewolf lighting kid just showed up. Yeah I don't know.

Condog: Of course it's words you made up, silly So's mine! Many, many, many words I made up. I have a few sets of conjugations, as well as several irregular verbs. I hate irregular verbs, but Pedla is supposed to be an authentic language rather than a fabricated one, and so irregular verbs it must have. Pedla is full and fully-functioning, but I'm always making new words anyway. I mean, it's workable now, but it's not complete.

Or by "words I made up," did you mean you only made up those four words? Because you can't truthfully say you made a language if it only has four words! I'm talking like Tolkein languages, Klingon, Na'vi (which, coincidentally, was made by the same guy who made Klingon), you know...that stuff.

As an aside, I enjoy writing songs in Pedla. It's a pretty cool language, I think. I don't have any words in it that I don't like, after all.

Oh, and you might want to watch out. No offense, but your character is sounding pretty darn Marty-Stuish to me right now. Actually, he sounded like that to me straight from the get-go, but this whole thing about Binarizing just makes it worse. I'd strongly advise giving him limits/weaknesses if you want him to be a believable character. 'Cause right now...I'm scratching my head here. You don't want your readers to scratch their heads. Just some advice from one writer to another ))

Peter and I sat bolt upright, looking at each other and blinking in disbelief. I mean, we're not surprised by a whole lot, but this...
"Did he just...?" I asked.
"He didn't shift..." Peter said. "Or did you feel something? Because I sure didn't..."
"No, no, he definitely didn't shift," I confirmed.
"So what the hell was that?"

Dan:
I flew around the area to see what I could see

"Well this has been an interesting day....I had my art critiqueed by Victor whose supposed to be dead, I met a werewolf /superhero, and I've met shifters. Where's the neariest exit to the insane asylum?" said Evan.

Dan:
I rematerialize in front of them and I say, "well I didn't find anything interesting the street goes on for a while". I look around and laugh at there faces and explain binirization. I then proceed to put my hand on Peter's head binarize him and reforn him before their eyes.

gh3325 wrote:"Well this has been an interesting day....I had my art critiqueed by Victor whose supposed to be dead, I met a werewolf /superhero, and I've met shifters. Where's the neariest exit to the insane asylum?" said Evan.

Victor: "You shouldn't be so surprised. After all, when my uncle first sent me to university, I studied science under Dr Stanleigh Peppercorn... fifteen years before he was born. he made some astounding leaps in the field of chronoportation. In fact, he gave me a lift here, saying I was needed for some reason. It's a shame he didn't mention the Lost Boys that were waiting for me.

Dan:
"I don't understand" I say looking at victor puzzled

condog wrote:Dan:
"I don't understand" I say looking at victor puzzled

Victor: "You know, chronoportation. Like teleportation. From chrono, meaning time, and port, meaning carry. Thus carrying through time, or time-travel. It's physically impossible, but it still happens."

"So your a time traveler too?" asked Cassie.

"I wouldn't be surprised..." said Evan.

Dan:
"Wow, everyone here has some sort of crazy crap goin on..." I say, and still looking out the window I ask, "Are we gonna stay here forever?"

condog wrote:Dan:
I rematerialize in front of them and I say, "well I didn't find anything interesting the street goes on for a while". I look around and laugh at there faces and explain binirization. I then proceed to put my hand on Peter's head binarize him and reforn him before their eyes.

((Language warning!))

"What the FUCK did you just do to me?!" Peter demanded, giving the lightning werewolf kid a livid stare. "NEVER do that again!" He sighed, pinching the bridge of his nose. "So you don't understand Pedla, then? I don't know how you work with non-humans if you don't know Pedla..."

gh3325 wrote:"So your a time traveler too?" asked Cassie.

"I wouldn't be surprised..." said Evan.

Victor: "Not exactly. I just happen to know one. It's not what you know, it's who you know. A lot like the rest of life, really."

Dan:
"No I dont speak Piddle or whatever it is, but nonhumans where I come from speak Basic, even animals understand basic fluently even better than the language their masters teach them, its an amazing language it was defined from basic animal instincts therefore Basic, and I binarized you, turned you into binary code, dont worry i only lose a piece of someone once in every 5 times" I said proudly i was exxagerating my skills i almost always left body parts on someone else by accident